After the peer review, I realized I used “thus” like ten times throughout the paper and so I went back and changed the majority of them. Also, I expanded on why I was so interested in Marine Science to begin with, as it did not come across as evident. I also emphasized a single area that helped me to decide on a set major. Finally, I tried to get rid of material unrelated to the paper.
Strengths
1). I feel that my reasons why I had a dilemma switching majors were evident.
2). What I took away from the experience is another strength in my paper.
weaknesses
- Work on clarifying what made marine science so important to me
- Create more varied sentence structures
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